This is a beautiful song. My only suggestion is that it seems a little repetitive - a piano solo, or maybe just some differentiation would make this perfect.
I'm certainly not docking you on score for this, but what in GODS name is this doing under dubstep? When I listen to dubstep I usually expect the bassline to rip me to pieces. This is closer to *ambient* than dubstep. :D
(Not trying to be a jerk, just genuinely curious.)
Haha well it's 140 and has dubsteppy beats, so I though... Sorry :(
But no, totally agree, going to remake it for the next EP with (hopefully) singing! :)
(And yes, i'll pop a solo in)
Beautiful intro.
Some comments.
If you're going to do chiptune, you may as well go all the way and chiptune the drums too. Real drums sound kind of strange when the melody is so chippy.
You have some great stuff in here. Those piano arps at like 2:45 are fantastic!
You've got a good ear for melody. They have this great tinge of melancholia. My biggest problem is that you jump from melody to melody almost at random. It's very difficult to understand the song unless you pay really close attention. Some transitions between your different ideas would really help. Once I started paying attention, it was much better.
Anyway, I really enjoyed this.
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This is a very beautiful song. However, if I am to go into super critic mode, I feel like the melody you opened with is your best, and everything else is almost extraneous in comparison. You open with this really contemplative piano melody, but then its almost as if you forgot about that and try to do some other unrelated stuff. Like the synth at 1:10 seems a little undirected.
I do like how you switched up chord progressions halfway in. Nice touch.
Thank you for the review. The reason it seems a bit disjointed may be because of what I was feeling when writing this song. Without going into much detail, it's been a hard couple of months, so I tried to make my song something positive that still managed to express underlying feelings of doubt or suppression.
Long story short, Outside the Atmosphere is about going so far from the world that everything below becomes trivial. The primary melody represents the underlying feelings previously noted while later in the song it becomes more of a springboard into brighter (3:35) or simpler and calmer (4:38) things.
The song ends with the original melody as a representation of returning to the ground.
I guess I should have put that in the description... I may do so, but that's why you felt the way you did. Thanks again for the review! I do appreciate it.
Very nice track. What impresses me most is that you moved away from your traditional baselines and chirpy melodies. The instrumentation is practically flawless. The buildup to that central drums section is well done. That brass sounds like Hans Zimmer (Inception).
If this is the soundtrack of an alien battle, I don't think the humans win. :)
Thanks alot :D That is so great to hear! yeah i know i have it in me to make other things. when i actually try hard. haha. thanks for the review! :D
I've listened to this song a LOT (one of my favorites) so i apologize for what's going to be an incredibly pedantic review...
You miss a chord change at :44 and 1:10. I noticed it happen a few more times throughout the song. It's a minor I think. VERY IMPORTANT. :P :P
The biggest thing to me though is that the original version is a bit slower. Compare both versions. Stevens takes time to really put emphasis on the words.
Last thing. Get your bro to sing his heart out. Those parts are the most emotionally intense parts of the song! Make the listener cry. >:D
Anyway... beautiful song, great cover.
Why have i never responded to this? :|
And yeah, couldn't play that chord if i remember correctly :p
Thanks for the review! ^_^
Okay that was totally bizarre. The first half feels off for me. I think it's the instrument choice. Maybe if you reimagined it with different instruments it could be a lot better. It sounds a lot to me like a demented carnival ride or something, so maybe making it more orchestral could improve it?
The second half though I really like, it's really pretty. If it was just the second half I'd give you a 8 or 9/10. My only gripe is that the piano feels mechanical. If you play with the velocity a little bit it may sound better. Anyway that's a nitpick, the second half is great.
Thanks for listening! This is actually a "dark electronic" sound that I was going for. Also based off of a full orchestral song that i've done :D
I have a strange reverb set up on the pianos at the end so to get that effect I had to push the velocity hard on the key strokes. Good ear though :]
compromise ;_;
The chords and beat that you open with are fantastic. I was a little iffy when it disappeared, but the build back to it at 1:40... PERFECT. (You really love those distortions and slides.)
Streamline the breaks a little. Example, that break at 1:10 is nice but the melody is a little off. You may be able to do without the chime at all and just let the pads do the work?
A good melody is right under the surface at 3:50 - just trim a few notes and I think it will be awesome.
Anyway yeah, this is great. Was thinking about 8/10 and then bumped it up because that build up at 1:40 is TOO GOOD. Lol normally on NG when people have buildups they write the build up first and then it's like "whoops nothing interesting to put here" but your song is the other way around.
3:50 is the pads your hearing -.- lol
Really? I actually rather liked that chippy melody but meh i geuss it could of done without them. And if you havn't known anything about me,
ArcaneSoul = Pads and autogun lol.
Thx for the review and yes the builds, so awesome.
This is a nice song. I definitely get the sense of wandering around and feeing vaguely happy. haha.
A few suggestions:
Move that baseline part (the lower, repetitive part) of the acid sytrus into an actual bass instrument (since it's bass). Keep the rest on the acid.
Try doing a pitch bend on the acid. It sounds really cool.
Keep it up!
Why thank you very much! Yeah, that actually never crossed my mind. When I created it, it was all acid, and I separated it making so the bass could kick in when I was laying out the song. Thanks for the review! ~Xsalvaz
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